This poem again seems written with heart onlySee, All the picture and the poetry itself, All describing .. Burning Hearts, A Gorgeous Woman (YOU Are More Than Gorgeous), Soothing Wine & the TIME .. WOW Impeccable !!!Amit verma
bahut hi umdaa. likhte rahiye. mujhe behas pasand aai. thanksWAFAA KI KOI KASAR NA CHHODEE IS TARAH DEEWANAA KIYAA TUMANE AMIT k sagar
wonderful vakai pad kar kadam behkne lage hai---keep it uppicturization ke aage shabd chote pad gaye hai kise dekhoon kise chahoon, kiska naam loonye phool sa chehra ya "full" sa jaam loon"surender kumar abhhin"
'sulag raha hoon, aur dhuan bhee utha huaa haimain aa gaya hoon kahan pe dekho yeh kaisa sama hua hailog hain jai jai kar kartay hamen na djaaney ye kya hua haitumharee nazren tumharee baaten tumhare chitron ko dekhta hoonnasha wohee hai jo chadh ke bolay hamain kuch aisa nasha hua haikareeb aao ki tum ko dekhenkahan chupee ho waraq ke peechayzara jhalak jo ke dikh rahi hai isee se kaisa saman hua hai............."---Seema .......again across boudary.....a big sixCongratulations.....tumahara prashansak
wonderful jobop
well written. Its in meter almost.GoodAvaneesh
Seema Ji,All your poems are really great and full of pains which everybody in one or other way is facing in his life and full of truth of life.You are just greatI really like all your poemsRegardsYour admirer
ज़ब्त से कुछ काम ले लो,ख़ुद पे यह इल्जाम ले लो...जिसका डर था हो न जाए,उसको अपने नाम ले लो .कुछ नशा है उखडा उखडा,आओ हम से जाम ले लो ...गिर न जाएं देखना तुम ,अपने हाथों थाम ले लो...नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,आशिके बदनाम ले लो "wounderful fir se dher sari subhkamnaye
NAAM UNAKA JAB BHI AYA HAI KAHINLOG SAB DEKHA KIYE MERI TARAFVirendra
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,आशिके बदनाम ले लो "--bahut umda.
seemaji, aap bhut sundar gahare bhav ke sath kavitye likhti hai. bhut badhiya. or bhi sundar rachanao ke liye meri shubhakamnaye.
Ilzaam le lo, waah beautiful, good creation......AAP BHI SUNIYE CHAAR LINE JO BHI KARO SALIKE SE HAR KAAM LE LOIBTIDAA JO HO TO KHUDA KA NAAM LE LOMANZIL KADAM CHUMEGI TUMHARE YAQINANUN FARISHTON KA HASEEN PAYAAM LE LO SURINDER RATTI
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,आशिके बदनाम ले लोgood & best wishes
sidha hi ilzam...sidhai hi vaar...bahot khub...नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,आशिके बदनाम ले लो ye sher to kamaal hain...
शराबी के दो ही ठिकाने ठेके जाए या थानेबखूब
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This poem again seems written with heart only
See, All the picture and the poetry itself, All describing ..
Burning Hearts, A Gorgeous Woman (YOU Are More Than Gorgeous), Soothing Wine & the TIME .. WOW
Impeccable !!!
Amit verma
bahut hi umdaa. likhte rahiye. mujhe behas pasand aai. thanks
WAFAA KI KOI KASAR NA CHHODEE
IS TARAH DEEWANAA KIYAA TUMANE
AMIT k sagar
wonderful vakai pad kar kadam behkne lage hai---keep it up
picturization ke aage shabd chote pad gaye hai
kise dekhoon kise chahoon, kiska naam loon
ye phool sa chehra ya "full" sa jaam loon
"surender kumar abhhin"
'sulag raha hoon,
aur dhuan bhee utha huaa hai
main aa gaya hoon kahan pe dekho yeh kaisa sama hua hai
log hain jai jai kar kartay
hamen na djaaney ye kya hua hai
tumharee nazren tumharee baaten
tumhare chitron
ko dekhta hoon
nasha wohee hai jo chadh ke bolay
hamain kuch aisa nasha hua hai
kareeb aao ki tum ko dekhen
kahan chupee ho waraq ke peechay
zara jhalak jo ke dikh rahi hai
isee se kaisa saman hua hai............."---
Seema .......again across boudary.....a big six
Congratulations.....
tumahara prashansak
wonderful job
op
well written. Its in meter almost.
Good
Avaneesh
Seema Ji,
All your poems are really great and full of pains which everybody in one or other way is facing in his life and full of truth of life.
You are just great
I really like all your poems
Regards
Your admirer
ज़ब्त से कुछ काम ले लो,
ख़ुद पे यह इल्जाम ले लो...
जिसका डर था हो न जाए,
उसको अपने नाम ले लो .
कुछ नशा है उखडा उखडा,
आओ हम से जाम ले लो ...
गिर न जाएं देखना तुम ,
अपने हाथों थाम ले लो...
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,
आशिके बदनाम ले लो "
wounderful fir se dher sari subhkamnaye
NAAM UNAKA JAB BHI AYA HAI KAHIN
LOG SAB DEKHA KIYE MERI TARAF
Virendra
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,
आशिके बदनाम ले लो "
--bahut umda.
seemaji, aap bhut sundar gahare bhav ke sath kavitye likhti hai. bhut badhiya. or bhi sundar rachanao ke liye meri shubhakamnaye.
Ilzaam le lo, waah beautiful, good creation......
AAP BHI SUNIYE CHAAR LINE
JO BHI KARO SALIKE SE HAR KAAM LE LO
IBTIDAA JO HO TO KHUDA KA NAAM LE LO
MANZIL KADAM CHUMEGI TUMHARE YAQINAN
UN FARISHTON KA HASEEN PAYAAM LE LO
SURINDER RATTI
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,
आशिके बदनाम ले लो
good & best wishes
sidha hi ilzam...sidhai hi vaar...bahot khub...
नाम मेरा क्या करोगी ,
आशिके बदनाम ले लो
ye sher to kamaal hain...
शराबी के दो ही ठिकाने
ठेके जाए या थाने
बखूब
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